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envy – dverse noku

April 10, 2014

I envy bears who hibernate
dormant grass passively waits
for the warmth of you

Most of my haiku’s start pure but end up breaking all the rules. Sometimes, they even go more lines. Hence, noku.

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From → dverse, poetry

34 Comments
  1. nice…love the warmth in this…and i envy them as well…smiles

  2. I like the idea of a noku…mainly because adhering strictly to the haiku form can be quite a challenge.

    I think I too envy the bear, for the waiting grass and the delicious berries and the pretty flowers and…

  3. Sorry… nokus, not Nokia. Stupid auto-correct.

  4. Sometimes rules are meant to be broken! I also envy the bears who get to sleep through winter. I like the idea of Nokia!

  5. Not something that Donne would have attempted πŸ™‚

    • probably part of the reason 500 years after he’s gone we still recite his poems πŸ™‚

  6. Noku sounds like a great form for rebellious poets… But it’s got that lovely haiku wistfulness. nevertheless.

  7. Nice one.The haiku police will be after you:)

    • they have stopped by from time to time. I have a fake mustache and black glasses nearby πŸ™‚

  8. Hibernation – conjures thoughts of plenty and peace

    Noku – Okay πŸ™‚

    • I thought of this as I was riding my bike on a bleak day that should have been warm and springlike – almost a haiku πŸ™‚

  9. biggerthanalasagna permalink

    The name of your form made me laugh out loud and stopped my kids from playing. I think I would be more likely to write noku rather haiku.

  10. Great Bill, very entertaining you could be on the verge of creating a new form, the NOKU…would suit all of us who struggle with the rules of set forms…..what are rules but to be bent if not broken.

  11. Well…… What the Fuku!
    Love your Noku! 😎 😎
    (Am I breaking rules, too?)

  12. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) permalink

    The name made me laugh. (And I may well adopt it!) The poem I adore.

  13. Cool name for your form, Bill! Given the right circumstances, I am sure hibernating can be wonderful, even if now I feel more like walking outside.

  14. noku…i may actually have a chance at writing one them….smiles.
    i am all for breaking the rules…

  15. Oh yes…there is something to be said for hibernation!! (This past winter I would have enjoyed it rather than enduring it.)

  16. This made me laugh and then reflect. I’m with the others – break those rules! I love the name NOKU! I think you’re on to something here. The poem is a great example – how to not write haiku effectively. Love it!

  17. noku — love the name.. and just breaking the rules make it fun.

  18. love this! I believe that haiku writers should break haiku rules as often as possible πŸ™‚

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