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sunrise – friday fictioneers zeds 21 Zombies

February 6, 2013

This story is prompted for Friday Fictioneers – kindly hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields Come try your hand at a 100 word story. Here is today’s photo prompt

Reaper has gone to destroy the hive, the girl awaits on a fire-escape with a sniper rifle to cover his escape…

She awoke at dawn, head resting on the rifle barrel.

“My God — Reaper!” She fired wildly, searching the ruins below through the scope for a trace of him, his sword. “Be safe” she whispered.

There would be no jets or cavalry rescue. It was Reaper and her, and maybe that eccentric Madman. The world had shrunk into small enclaves, and hope with it. Travel spread the plague, everyone a rival for scarce food in this tribal time. How could there be space for love here?

She fired repeatedly, each shot a killer as the tears streamed down her face.

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48 Comments
  1. Good stuff, even squeezed in a jet!

  2. I like the bit about her waking at dawn with head on the rifle. That’s the thing about the zombie apocalypse, isn’t it? Like a war, there is no real rest from it. I think I would rather be eaten by zombies than to have to run from them all the time!

    • yes, that’s the eternal question when confronted by evil, do we yield or fight?

      I’m glad you caught that part about her falling asleep, and the repercussions of awakening. That was my favorite part to write.

      • Cool! Yes, I did. You captured it well. I always know something is well written in zombie stories or good vs. evil, when this is addressed. That would be hardest thing. There is no rest. At some point, people are probably just too tired to keep fighting. Hopefully, I will not be finding this out!

        • Stand strong it hope! I think I have the general finish in mind, of course the picture prompts can change everything.

          I do have the last lines in mind, might be a bit cheezy, but people who do zombie stories are rarely known for understatement πŸ™‚

          • Indeed! I just watched a few episodes of ‘Walking Dead.” Yikes!!

            • haven’t seen that yet. My daughters turned me on to Resident Evil, so we played the game together trying to survive.

              I like them, not so much the gore, but what is hope and what will you sacrifice for others.

              • I’ll warn you, “Walking Dead” is a gore fest! It is probably the most realistic zombie story I’ve ever seen! They work on the hope/sacrifice front. Also, a very intricate story in place, I’m too far behind to understand at the moment.

                • I don’t stay current on TV, we just got the Battlestar Galactica DVDs — I find watching shows on DVD with no commercials very intense.

  3. I could feel hope fading. Loved the line about the world shrinking into small enclaves and hope with it. Nicely done! ( now that I read other comments, I see I’m not alone…..).

    • Thanks Erin — I appreciate your stopping by. Even though it’s a little 100 word effort, when someone likes it, I get a taste of how a real novelist must feel when someone likes their books.

      It surprises me how strongly one feels about it.

  4. You have some truly beautiful lines in this one…very well done

  5. Lots of excitement here–and lots of folks pulling for Reaper and the girl. Please don’t disappoint us, Bill.

    • thanks VB, that compliment makes me so happy I feel like JK Rowling, minus a billion dollars of course! πŸ™‚

  6. “The world had shrunk into small enclaves, and hope with it.” What a great line. This story just keeps getting better.

  7. We are all keeping our fingers crossed for Reaper.. I expected him to come running out of the hive at the end.

    • Aha — you may be prophetic, or my plot cliche πŸ™‚ — but there might be a surprise or two remaining!

      always glad when you stop by.

  8. Zombies must die! Go Reaper, take them all down. Let’s hope in the shooting the girl knows who is who. Reaper has enough trouble without her taking pot shots his way.

  9. Dear Bill,

    You’re going to have the last laugh on all of us, aren’t you?

    On a technical note— (Is it possible to accurately fire a sniper rifle while crying?) Save them for us, Bill, because we’ve grown to love them so.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • thanks Doug — agree on the tears, but it was so vivid in my mind’s eye I had to suspend belief and go for the imagery.

      As for laughing, this has been great fun for me. Thanks for stopping by. PS – your world ball ( previous prompt ) plays a prominent role at the end.

  10. Dear Bill,
    Somehow I can picture Janet covering you while you chase zombies. Nice build…can’t wait to see what happens next. One note…”she fired regularly” has a Phillips Milk of Magnesia feel. Maybe “repeatedly”.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

    • Thanks Rochelle – I appreciate that you took the time to make the suggestion. Repeatedly can “tighten” things up, and I have made the edit.

      I just have to tell someone, for Doug’s World Ball (from a past prompt ) features prominently at the end.

  11. Not big on zombies, but lots of action here. Hope she’s got renough ammo.

  12. Oh boy, I hope she’s conserving enough ammo in case all hell breaks loose, which happens regularly during zombie apocalypses.

  13. let’s hope she has as many bullets as she has tears. well done.

  14. Very convincing.

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    “How could there be space for love here?” That’s the line I like. You manage to weave parts of this story well with so few words.

    • thanks! I have to keep it short ’cause my fingers get tired.. πŸ™‚

      It continues to surprise me how much fun it is to write this little story.

  16. I love how you still manage to keep up the pace and drop us back in the world, in such short snippets.

  17. “The world had shrunk into small enclaves, and hope with it.” –a favorite line.

  18. Just like you and me. πŸ™‚

  19. Terrific story telling!

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